tolkien's first draft


click for larger viewIn Tolkien's first drafts of LotR, he intended for Éowyn (called "Éowyn Elfsheen") to marry Aragorn and become Queen of Gondor. Below are a few of the passages that highlight Tolkien's first thoughts on A/E. These are published in The History of Middle Earth series edited by Christopher Tolkien. The first plans for A/E appear in The Treason of Isengard, and the rest appear in The War of the Ring.

Parts in italics are Christopher Tolkien's commentary; the rest is Tolkien's writing.

From the first draft of "The King of the Golden Hall"
Éowyn Elfsheen daughter of Éomund?

Very fair and slender she seemed. Her face was filled with gentle pity, and her eyes shone with unshed tears. So Aragorn saw her for the first time in the light of day, and after she was gone he stood still, looking at the dark doors and taking little heed of other things.

Aragorn was silent, but his eyes followed Éowyn

Long she looked upon Aragorn, and long he looked upon her

And after Théoden’s words, Aragorn says: ‘If I live, I will come, Lady Éowyn, and then maybe we will ride together.’ Then Éowyn ‘smiled and bent her head gravely.’

Aragorn weds Éowyn sister of Éomer (who becomes Lord of Rohan) and becomes King of Gondor.


Tolkien's notes on the chapter:
? Cut out the love story of Aragorn and Éowyn. Aragorn is too old and lordly and grim. Make Éowyn a stern amazon woman.

If so, alter the message of Galadriel:


The green stone was borne on Théoden’s brow (a diamond in the final version), and Éowyn would stand "in the shadow of the dark throne."

Probably Éowyn should die to avenge or save Théoden.

But my father added in a hasty scribble the possibility that Aragorn did indeed love Éowyn, and never wedded after her death.


Random passages and notes:
They strike the Dunharrow ravine on the second day. Aragorn rides with Éowyn.

Aragorn had already arrived and greets King Théoden side by side with Éowyn.

Aragorn and Éowyn meet the King. They say that Riders are mustering at Dun Harrow.

Éowyn says that women must ride now, as they did in a like evil time.

On either side of the King were Éowyn and Éomer, and Aragorn beside Éowyn.


Tolkien's different ideas on the Battle of the Pelennor; he originally planned for Éowyn to die:
(I) Feb 15 – Éowyn slays the King of the Nazgûl and is mortally wounded.

(II) Feb 3 – Death of Théoden and Éowyn in killing the Nazgûl King.
Feb 7 – Return to Gondor. Crowning of Aragorn. Funeral of Théoden and Éowyn.

(III) Feb 11 – Théoden and Éowyn destroy Nazgûl and Théoden falls.

Théoden falls from horse sorely wounded; he is saved by Merry and Éowyn, but sortie from Gate does not reach them in time, before Éowyn is slain.


Original version of Éowyn slaying the Witch-King:
But Théoden was not alone. One had followed him: Éowyn daughter of Éomund, and all had feared the light of her face, shunning her as night fowl turn from the day. Now she leapt from her horse and stood before the shadow; her sword was in her hand.

"Come not between the Nazgûl and his prey," said a cold voice, "or he will bear thee away to the houses of lamentation, beyond all darkness where thy flesh shall be devoured and thy shrivelled mind be left naked."

She stood still and did not blanch. "I do not fear thee, Shadow," she said. "Nor him that devoured thee. Go back to him and report that his shadows and dwimor-lakes are powerless even to frighten women." The great bird flapped its wings and leapt into the air, leaving the king’s body, and falling upon her with beak and claw. Like a shaft of searing light a pale sword cold as ice was raised above her head.

She raised her shield, and with a swift and sudden stroke, smote off the bird’s head. It fell, its vast wings outspread crumpled and helpless on the earth. About Éowyn the light of day fell bright and clear. With a clamour of dismay the hosts of Harad turned and fled . . . Éowyn stepped to the king. "Alas, Théoden son of Thengel," she said. "But you have turned the tide. See, they fly. The enemy is broken by fear. Never did an old Lord of Men die better. You shall sleep well, and no Shadow nor foul thing assail your bed."

There is no suggestion that Éowyn was in any way hurt in the encounter with the Lord of the Nazgûl or after . . . no part was foreseen for Merry in the great event.


First version of "The Last Debate":
Gimli, Legolas, and Pippin talk. They hear of the love of Éowyn for Aragorn in Dunharrow.

"So they told us," said Legolas, "and they forbade us to go in; but Aragorn could not be turned from it. He was in a grim mood. And that fair lady that lies now in the Houses below, Éowyn, wept at his going. Indeed at the last in the sight of all she set her arms about him, imploring him not to take that road, and when he stood there unmoved, stern as stone, she humbled herself to kneel in the dust. It was a grievous sight."

"But do not think that he was not moved," said Gimli. "Indeed, I think Aragorn himself was so deeply grieved that he went through all perils after like a man that can feel little more. He raised her up and kissed her hand, and then without a word we set out."